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Saturday, 28 December 2019

W2 D3 A2 The right to an education

MY SHORT STORY



 Yesterday on a fine sunny morning we were packing our stuff ready to go to the beach. I couldn't wait for my toes to touch the golden sand and the waves from the glimmering sea to splash on me.

 We finished packing and went off to go pick up my cousin before going to the beach to have double the fun. It was fun until my puppies started to bark and cry for food like they have never eaten before.
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Once we feed the pains in the neck we finally reached our destination; The BEACH!

 I ran over to see the sand as golden as a trophy, the shells as sharp as prickles, and the sea as blue as the sky. Well, if there was a sea. The tide was out and the water was as far as an endless hallway. All there was left was a a dry desert with no hydration. 

 My mum setup our resting area near a beautiful palm tree swaying its leaves in the direction of the wind.
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After eating delicious food from my dad we thought it was time to go home and have a shower.



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2 comments:

  1. Daniel15 January 2020 at 09:02

    Hey Zayden,

    This is a awesome short story! I'm curious to know, did you guys get to the water in the end? You have such great descriptive language and lots of metaphors like the 'endless hallway', the 'dry desert' and the shells that are 'sharp as prickles'. The photos are beautiful and the food photo is just mean it looks so tasty. Great stuff Zayden!

    See you in the comments.

    Daniel :)

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  2. Anonymous15 January 2020 at 10:52

    Hello Zayden,
    Are you having an amazing day? I sure am! I really like how you added pictures so we could visualize it better. I also really like how you made a long description and added tons and tons of similes. I think that sucks if you are ready to swim and then the tide is all the way out. I remember one time when I was going to go swimming at the beach, the tide was out and we just went home after that. Maybe next time you could add a bit more information about what you ate and things like that. Overall, this is a phenomenal blog post! Keep up the astonishing work!

    Vitaraag

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